Let's be honest....

[Beloved by God]

Are these two things written below any good, or does it just sound like whining? To be really honest I don't usually like poems that don't rhyme, and I don't know if I should try to work on these two some more, or if I should just pitch them in the trash. Be honest, if its not good I'll start over. I was just kind of writing and this is what came out.

I'm knocking Lord,
Should I knock louder?
I'm praying Lord,
Should I pray louder?
Should I pray with others,
Should I burden them also?

>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>

The Strength to Sleep

Strengthen my heart Lord
Give me the strength to wait
And to be patient
Help me to be strong and enduring
Give me rest and let me sleep
Let me sleep the sleep of babes

[TRL1957]

Are these two things written below any good, or does it just sound like whining? To be really honest I don't usually like poems that don't rhyme, and I don't know if I should try to work on these two some more, or if I should just pitch them in the trash. Be honest, if its not good I'll start over. I was just kind of writing and this is what came out.

I'm knocking Lord,
Should I knock louder?
I'm praying Lord,
Should I pray louder?
Should I pray with others,
Should I burden them also?

>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>

The Strength to Sleep

Strengthen my heart Lord
Give me the strength to wait
And to be patient
Help me to be strong and enduring
Give me rest and let me sleep
Let me sleep the sleep of babes

DO NOT THROW AWAY!! Your poems are good! I especially like the first one. :)

[SFASH]

These two poems are keepers! Rhyme, like meter, can be very subtle and can be expressed in ways that do not involve two repeated sounds. I think ya got it. I would read these two poems and be comforted at any time. (I'm crazy about poetry:)

[verseode]

be at peace with your gift,you have the ability to say what you are feeling,which helps us in the same boat to realise that we are not the only ones.There is only one who hates what you are doing and he puts doubts in your mind.You are gushing creativity,may there be many more.God Bless,Mike.

[Beloved by God]

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Thank you guys, that all means a lot to me. It's so nice to know that this poetry, this stuff, is helpful and not just papers taking up space.

Should I?

I'm knocking Lord,
Should I knock louder?
I'm praying Lord,
Should I pray louder?
Should I pray with others,
Should I burden them also?
Of course your burden is light...
And You said to pray with others.
You said to pray unceasingly;
But am I whining
Should I ask for running over,
Or just enough?
Should I be content,
Or should I petition heaven?
Should I call on Your promises
or be silent and abiding?
You will not give me stones
But what will I get...
And when will I get it?

[TRL1957]

Beloved, this is a honest, heartfelt poem, and I love it!:)

[bright&morningstar]

your writing is very good.
I love them!
:]]

[Beloved by God]

Thank you guys, may you all have a blessed day today.