Beloved by God
Sep 6th 2008, 11:46 PM
Okay, not sure about this one.
Tell me if it is good, or if there are any lines I need to re-work Although I kind of like the way the last two lines rhyme, without the beginning line.
Seeking Grace
Just when I thought I was standing so tall
Just when I thought I had done so well
I was reminded I'm not far from hell
Puffed up so proud I feel pretty hard
Realization came when I tasted the dirt
With pride I shouldn't flirt
Power and pride make a tall man
But a heavy head soon sways
I have been brought back from my ways
On bent knee with a bruise face
I seek Your Grace
Tell me if it is good, or if there are any lines I need to re-work Although I kind of like the way the last two lines rhyme, without the beginning line.
Seeking Grace
Just when I thought I was standing so tall
Just when I thought I had done so well
I was reminded I'm not far from hell
Puffed up so proud I feel pretty hard
Realization came when I tasted the dirt
With pride I shouldn't flirt
Power and pride make a tall man
But a heavy head soon sways
I have been brought back from my ways
On bent knee with a bruise face
I seek Your Grace